Days are long years,
numbered, getting shorter,
we must first get baby to take
we must tip-toe on Mars,
slow down near black holes.
Watch the forest
through the trees,
past the trees,
beyond the trees,
ne’er a tree will be
when you dive
off a cliff
and paddle strange stars
This poem was inspired by:
dVerse Poets Pub: MTB Lists that Google Give us
28 thoughts on “Time Out”
I love the beauty and creativity in this, specifically in this line:
“slow down near black holes.”
There’s just something about that line that makes it equally inviting and consuming. I love it and the figurative imagery you utilize in this poem. Amazing, amazing work.
Thank you, Lucy! That means a lot because I admire your creativity so much!
Love the use of trees in several verses, and ending bit which is magical.
Thanks for joining us.
Thanks, Grace! I’m glad you enjoyed 🙂
Wonderful writing, Tricia!
Thanks! I had fun with this prompt.
Love this especially; “we must tip-toe on Mars, slow down near black holes.” 🙂
Thanks for the feedback! I love a good prompt!
I think my head is always in the clouds! 🙂
“first get baby to take longer naps” made me smile and relive memories! Beautiful imagery, Tricia.
Thanks for reading! I saw that question when doing the google prompt search and smiled as well. 🙂
Hi Trisha. I believe this is the first work from you that I have ever read. But I’m old so I might’ve forgotten. I’m a day late getting around to reading peoples work but I really enjoyed reading your piece here.Love the image and how you use that to drive your poem. Well done. Look forward to reading more of your poetry. Thank you for sharing it.
Nice to meet you! I recently discovered dVerse poets pub and am enjoying the prompts. I also hang out on twitter a lot writing little snippets here and there. I will have to check your work out as well!
The days never seem long enough, do they? Yet when we pause to look at the stars it’s like we all the time in the world, right there before us.
so true! I love walking at night to decompress the day. Thanks for visiting!
From the breathtaking image through the last line of your poem …. I love it.
Thanks, Helen ♥️
It’s all relative. Nicely done, and I really like the image you chose.
I like your interesting images in your poem about time!
Thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed it 😊
I think getting closer to these black holes is especially important this week when it was finally awarded with a Nobel price 🙂 wonderful imagenery
Thanks! I was actually googling the prompts time and space and it said everything slows down around black holes and I thought there was a good metaphor there! haha So easy to get sucked into darkness these days!
Gorgeous picture and wonderful poem. Thanks for this post.
Thanks so much!