My exterior was ugly, hard –
clanking armor no one dared touch.
Until your clever arms snatched me,
plucked from ebony sky,
the stars swung all around,
a collage of bursting notes –
they painted Raw Sienna,
Prussian Blue, Cobalt Violet
upon the grass, we landed
and danced, our feet,
they filled the spaces,
I couldn’t help,
the pounding beat,
was it my heart?
The colors smeared,
soft and crazy,
Grace is today’s host for dVerse Meet the Bar. Grace says:
The writing challenge: Today we will incorporate music in our poem from the perspective of a synesthete. Create your own Symphony. Infuse your musical experience when listening to a band, artist or musical genre, with colors, sounds & textures. Write a song filled with colors.
I was also inspired by this version of “Can’t Help Falling in Love” which influenced my title and ending lines!
“Can’t Help Falling in Love” Cover [DARK VERSION] (feat. brooke) // Produced by Tommee Profitt – YouTube
28 thoughts on “Falling in Love”
I really like how you wove this from hard shell to soft and mushy falling in love! Well done!
Aww, I’m all mushy inside you like it now! ❤
:>) That is how it is!!
Just a gooey mess! haha!
So raw and beautiful!
Thanks so much! 🥰
This really captures the experience of falling in love in all its glorious technicolour 🌈
Thanks, Ingrid! 💗🏵️🌷
very cutely romantic, you captured the essence well!
Thanks, Kate 🏵️💖🌷
The ending is so smooth! Lovely poetry🙂
Oh my heart this is absolutely splendid, Tricia 😀 I love; “they painted Raw Sienna, Prussian Blue, Cobalt Violet upon the grass, we landed and danced, our feet, they filled the spaces, I couldn’t help, the pounding beat.” You describe all there is to love and more! 💝💝
Thanks so much, Sanaa! ❤
A muscular piece pursuing love like a pup chasing a ball, smearing the color spectrum wonderfully; really impressive rocking of the prompt. I liked “plucked from ebony sky, the stars swung all around, a collage of bursting notes.”
Thanks, Glenn! I’m happy those lines worked for you, this was a fun write! ❤
So sweet and great love story. I specially love the ending of the colors smering and intensifying, with the musical piece.
Thanks for joining in.
Thanks for the prompt, Grace! I enjoyed the challenge! ❤
This is a loving and tender poem Tricia, very well written.
Thanks so much, Rob! 💗
The way you actually FALL in love is excellent… tripping and tumbling to music is exactly how it felt one time.
Yes! 💗 🎶
Tricia I love your wild cavorting and how things narrowed into that love land. Beautiful
Thanks, Lisa! ❤