She wore darkness and light in equal
parts, half heaven,
half hell, she’d seen the abyss and now
talked too loud,
yet she sang softly a song, 
right inside her love’s ear.

She was just a girl, understand, just a
girl who fell
for a boy, just as hard as Lucifer ever
fell from the sky, and she scratched
at the stars, the light bubbling up

underneath sharp nails,
she clawed at his soul

and carved out a hole,
he curses and

worships her


Written for the dVerse prompt:

  • see if you can hook yourself a new reader with upfront vivid images and unusual word use
  • maybe stick with tradition (starting top left) or forge out in a new direction, maybe even a one line, or even a one-word poem (though please read the article that I’ve linked to Saroyan’s poem)  
  • perhaps try your hand at some found poetry, make something shapely or striking or something off the fridge
  • or perhaps a poem beginning with a line by a poet who’s provoked or enthralled or charmed or annoyed you (don’t forget to link to the original poem in your post).

Published by Tricia Sankey

Plays with words in her free time.

30 thoughts on “Eclipse

  1. Yum what a delicious piece. I was hooked from the first line – and followed as the poem and their love descended into madness. I particularly liked how the explanations drop away and the last lines are a scant few syllables – really there’s nothing more to say…

  2. One of the things I love most in writing is when two opposites meet. We had a prompt on this a while ago, and there are some great beginnings you can draw from the contrast.

    “it was the best of times it was the worst of times” – Charles Dickens, tale of two cities

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