His Eyes

As we danced, his face moved
to mine and as our
eyes met I swooned, under his
cool, piercing power.

He whispered words that
teased, and my feet crept behind
his alluring chat.

Even along the far edge
of the sea, where old
tales spoke of dark mysteries –
making blood run cold.

His touch sparked desire
as we walked by the sea, then
a scream, “Run! Vampire!”

Today, Grace at dVerse has challenged us to write a Seguidilla. I had so much fun, I decided to double them up!

The Seguidilla is:
• stanzaic, written in any number of 2 part septets. (7 lines)
• syllabic, 7-5-7-5 : 5-7-5 per line. There is a slight pause between L4 and L5 suggesting L4 should be end-stopped.
• rhymed by assonance xAxABxB or xAxABAB. x being unrhymed. True rhyme is generally not used.
• composed with a volta or change in thought between L4 and L5.
• sometimes serves as a conclusion for another verse.


37 thoughts on “His Eyes

  1. I was ready for the big romantic moment but that ending line, snapped me out of it. Glad you had fun with the poetry form. Thanks for joining in.

  2. I loved the ending – this turned the poem into a lot of fun! I started out with Wuthering Heights and ended up at ‘Dracula: Dead and Loving it…’

  3. I almost passed up this form challenge. Not really my strong point. But I’m very glad that YOU, TS, didn’t opt out. You nailed it (form-wise) AND entertained me greatly. Thanks.

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