Relinquish reality and stretch your arms as a branch – raise your hands to lost roots they dangle just above the flood returns nothing but ancient sludge ~ sweep it away ~ let the abyss pound the mountain let the sun bake its pie leave me just the blue sky I want to jump high off this branch and relinquish reality
Today, we are writing poems in circles, with Peter at dVerse.
18 thoughts on “Look Up”
I can really feel how you return to the beginning or reality after such a journey through the flood where I feel you are almost drowning. Still I feel in the end, you are ready to travel again
Thanks for your thoughts, it is a let go and fly high type of poem!
I want to fly too! Away from the flood and the sun baked pie!
Haha! I hope your house flooding is getting better now. Take a little reality break!! 🥳🍷
Applauding I am 😀 this is stellar writing, Tricia! I love; “let the abyss
pound the mountain, let the sun bake it’s pie.” 💝💝 May we fly free and higher!
🥰 You are always too kind!! 💝
What an exuberant journey! – the poem just takes off in that last stanza, and some lovely imagery along the way – I loved the ‘underland’ image of lost roots dangling just above – all adds to the wonderful building energy. Great stuff.
Thanks so much, Peter! Enjoyed your prompt and stay dry down under!
This line — “let the sun bake its pie” — seemed to me the synergistic center of the movement of this poem! So much fun to read Tricia. Well done.
I love that phrase, the “synergistic center” you must be a poet!! I wanted this to be a fun read even though a little fed up with the world when I wrote it! 💕
Best way to shake it off! 🙂💞
Me too! I really enjoyed this, the fun of immersing yourself in a fantasy world. Makes me want to write a novel!
It’s great escapism. Fantasy definitely pulls me in more than realism lately!
I like the movement in the spacing of the opening and closing stanzas, Tricia, and the way you laid out the middle stanza and let it bake in the sun!
Thanks, Kim!! 💝
I think many people take drugs in order to relinquish reality. Holding on too tight to reality can be exhausting. You’ve shared a way to look into the mind of a free spirit. I like that graphic! So cool!
Thanks, Lisa! I think there are times I need to be more grounded but I like that I can disconnect without drugs or alcohol. I think I go into the “observer” mindset when I’m annoyed with life! Just escape above into clear blue sky! 💙
If you can do it without drugs you’ve got it made, high in the sky ❤