setting sun
toes in
water
sea-sweet wine
as I saunter
plodding through
knee-deep rhyme
waltzing thoughts
turn
back
time
you kept my
goldfish
in your pocket
nibbling
dust!
(and some
loose change)
Now, three quarters
and a dime
skip like rocks
across
my
mind.
Posted for dVerse Poets Pub where Bjorn
asks us to follow the beat of a waltz.
A waltz signifies any piece of music in
three quarters time. Even if I missed
a few beats, I did include
three actual quarters (and a dime!) 💗
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Tricia Sankey 
I love the humor in this waltz piece … and I could keep time. Cheers!
Thanks, Helen! I couldn’t keep serious today while writing! 🤣
Beautiful!
Thanks so much! 💝
Gorgeous!! The rhythm, the images, the gentle humour. Just gorgeous.
So good to hear! I wasn’t sure I could pull this waltz off this week. I generally don’t like to follow forms of any kind. But this was fun! 💝
Now, I’m just imagining a goldfish in a pocket. Fun poem with a waltz rhythm.
Thanks, Susan! Glad you enjoyed it! 💃
fun images dancing along, Tricia 🙂
Happy you enjoyed the twirl! 💃
Oh, so nicely done, Tricia! I love the rhythm rhyme, interwoven humour and wistfulness in this poem, especially ‘sea-sweet wine’ and the goldfish in the pocket nibbling dust!
Thanks, Kim! This poem just took me places I wasn’t expecting! 😆
Excellently done, in form, shape and subject. Who would keep your goldfish in his/her pocket? That sounds like unforgivable behaviour!
Thanks! Yes, I agree, animal abuse in any form is a deal breaker! 😉
A gorgeous sparse poem with choice words. I love the way you’ve arranged it on the space to reflect the steps too! Very clever 😀
So glad you enjoyed it, thanks for stopping by! 💖
Happy little goldfish! Me too!
Glad you enjoyed, Beverly! ❣️
I can really feel like dancing here… though I’m concerned for your goldfish (unless is the snack kind you may nibble on)
Thanks, Bjorn! Your prompt got my brain moving, (but unfortunately not my goldfish) 🤣
I skip along as I read your verses. Enjoyed the formatting of the lines too. Have a good week!!!
Thanks, Grace! Enjoy your week! 💝