You Complete Me (for dVerse Poetics)

33% of me is here
laughing as I weep
       crouched under
        sharp stars

The trees are restless
        swaying in the wind
        they are 90% gone
        underground
        to realms
                 around the bend
                   
Don't ask them for directions

You may ask the dirt
            
             to cradle your foot
             allow it to seep between
             ten toes as eleven
             flowers bloom
             in poetry and prose
            
take my hand 
as the universe unfolds

             "You complete me"
               in waves
and

 just as the seas grasp land

          we discover
                             new ways
  
                     to
                          expand          

        


Mish hosts at dVerse and invites us to select a movie quote and incorporate it into a poem of any style.

The quote included in my poem above is from Jerry Maguire.

Posted for Poetics @ dVerse Poets Pub

51 thoughts on “You Complete Me (for dVerse Poetics)

  1. I love this Tricia: so many clever devices! The percentages, the enjambment, the form…but most of all I love the sound and playfulness of your poem πŸ™‚

  2. Your percentages, your juxtapositioning (laughing as I weep; don’t ask them for directions but you may ask the dirt; ten toes are eleven), the pacing, the telling to “take my hand” and then the sea….just a great write for the line.

    • Thanks, Lillian, I never used to care for that line, “you complete me,” so much, but then I realized we all complete one another and it’s just a poetic union of our souls here! ✨

  3. This is absolutely spectacular! πŸ˜€ I so love the emotions in; “You may ask the dirt to cradle your foot/allow it to seep between ten toes as eleven flowers bloom in poetry and prose.” *Applauds* πŸ’™πŸ’™

  4. I’ll have what Ingrid’s having πŸ˜‰ because she really covered it all. I will add that the ending with it’s softening touch of internal rhyme just topped it off!

  5. I loved all the imagery in this poem, Tricia, a scene vividly painted. I love the lines: laughing as I weep crouched under sharp stars / and the rhyme at the end: just as the seas grasp land we discover new ways to expand ❀

  6. I so love to read nature inspired poems. I admire the word placement and verses complementing the famous quote. This is part is my favorite:

    flowers bloom
    in poetry and prose

  7. I love you way you’ve presented this poem, how it cascades down the page, it’s beautiful… then you get to the words… in the imagery of crouching to avoid the sharp stars… then the trees going to their roots – its great.

  8. I like the shape and layout of this poem, Tricia, and the contrast of the β€˜sharp stars’ with the seeping dirt and the seas grasping land. You’ve gathered together the different worlds above and underground and folded and unfolded them like a magic trick. The final lines are stunning.

  9. I am a big fan of letting words and lines scamper across the page..an e.e. cummings feel to it. Clever and well crafted word-smithing as well. I believe that true love, mixed with sex allows two incomplete beings to become one complete being for a few precious seconds.

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