The way I left (A quadrille for dVerse)

you toyed with me
stretched my coils
            
with words that hurt

oh how I cried
missing vowels

void of rhyme

where was the capitalized i
      the pain it lingered

shrunk
         me 
              down

in curious form 

       I 
          slunk

          off
                the
                      page


And closed the book.
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My response to dVerse Poets Pub Quadrille Monday: A Curiosity of Poems

Published by Tricia Sankey

Plays with words in her free time.

41 thoughts on “The way I left (A quadrille for dVerse)

  1. You’ve played not only with words but also with shape and form, Tricia. So enjoyable! What a way to be toyed with, having your coils stretched with words that hurt! Too bad the ‘capitalised I’ slunk off the page and closed the book.

  2. Slinking out is probably better than staying under such circumstances! I like the ‘stepped’ form which mimics a staircase which a slinky might slink down…

  3. Quadrilles always seem to be a preface for something longer, but yours is tight and complete, with lovely shapes and scampering words; loved it.

  4. Tricia, visceral-ness of this makes me shrink as I read it. Stretched coils, losing vowels, slinking away, no more capital “I” a Slinky is a perfect choice and then you put it in the format of a slinky. Powerful and clever. What I like best about it is your observation that those hurting encounters twist us into curious forms.

    1. Thanks for your comment, Lisa! It does feel like our guts are twisted up sometimes. Unrecognizable as we make our exit. Not just in romantic relationships either. So many relationships can twist us!

  5. Love the format and word play and that shrinking of the capitalized i.

    A sad emotional angst poem but well done with giving this a fresh new perspective.

  6. Love, love, love this. It truly does show how curiosity can further cause us pain and that perhaps the knowledge isn’t worth it, especially if it’s in the form of belittling others. Beautifully and cleverly written, Tricia. I feel the strength at the end with closing the book. It’s freeing and a sign of a hope to move on, even if it hurts. Brilliant.

      1. You have a way with words! And the more I read I get inspired.

        And the more I read I want to talk lol!

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