On paper I write
to feel your weight
one solid universe
of stone-inked
story
Missing words
mangle tongue
unwritten
cancelling sounds
roll off
unbitten
forget what I wrote
before the coffee
I drop the weight
of the world
in this pen
while the stone
rolls back
I rewrite
My response to Meeting the Bar where Laura asks us to repeat lines at dVerse.
Tricia Sankey 
Tricia,
This resonates with me. I can pour it all out on the page. “drop the weight of this world into a pen”
Thanks for sharing your poem today.
Ali
Thanks, Ali! I was hoping a few of my fellow poets would resonate with this! 💗
I loved this Tricia – not least that opening stanza. Strictly speaking, epiphora is consecutive end line repeats
Thanks, Laura! I appreciate the lesson on epiphora, it inspired this at least! 💕🥰🥳
glad to hear that
I can definitely relate to:
I drop the weight
of the world
in this pen
while the stone
rolls back
I rewrite
Thanks, Merril! Life is always a work in progress, isn’t it? 💗
Indeed. 😀
Oh yes we do!
Thanks, Beverly! 🌺😊🌸
Ooh, I love this. So much of our soul and world go into writing and you encapsulate that aspect so beautifully here. In these lines, it says it all:
“cancelling sounds
roll off
unbitten
forget what I wrote
before the coffee
I drop the weight
of the world
in this pen”
We say so much from our minds, for some, writing is like a relief. A weight off the shoulders.
Yes! I tried to repeat the word write in different ways, because we play around so much with our writing, trying to perfect it and right the wrongs on the page, at least. It is a release! ❤🙏❤
Introspection can be a good thing. I, too, find a pale reflection of my poetic self, and my cranky pen.
Thanks Glenn! Yes, introspection is often useful (and sometimes poetic!) 💝
Write and rewriting – I can identify with the process. I also like how powerful this can be, the weight of the world, a universe, in our pen.
Thanks, Grace, happy this resonated! 💝
Tricia, I read this again and again and every time it got better and better. Any poem with coffee in it is a good one. Nothing matters before coffee. Great poem.
Thanks so much, Lisa! I concur about the coffee! ☕
You’re welcome ❤
Very nicely done Tricia! I believe this is why writing is so therapeutic. It helps lift the weight of the world off our hearts!
Yes, I think it is great therapy! Thanks, Dwight! 💓
You are welcome!
very nice..
Pleased you enjoyed it! 💗
Beautifully presented piece, that speaks loud for its short length.
The single word lines add just the weight it needs, masterfully.
Pleased to hear the form and those lines worked! Thanks, Darius! 💝
the form created the heaviness so well.
the cascade felt heavier,
heavier,
heavier,
and when this line came, i lost it:
I drop the weight
of the world
in this pen
—
marvelous, Tricia!
Thanks for your kind comments! 💖
Fabulous! So relatable. Great work.
Appreciate your support! 💓
I like the variation of write/weight/rewrite. You’ve really captured how being a writer works in practice!
Thanks, Ingrid! 💖
Love how you used “weight” …. great write!!!!
Thanks, Helen! 💝
Preoccupied, I hadd refrain from working on this prompt; but you dunnit real good, TS. Thanx.
Appreciate your feedback, Ron! 💖
Tricia,
Tempted to say this is a lovely homage to the process of writing, especially as “the stone rolls back” as if to say the “weight” has given way. That’s the way I read it anyway. Lovely.
~🕊Dora
Yes, the weight falls away with the right words. Thanks, Dora! 💖
Beautiful.
Thanks so much, Xan! 💖
I love the careful way you picture the process of writing… I often spill the words as they come, maybe I should rewrite more… but my process is different.
Thanks! Sometimes I rewrite a poem months or years later. But the initial inspiration I allow to flow. Longer stories I definitely edit too much!