The Garden

I didn’t understand. I couldn’t remember. I stumbled into the white light or maybe I was pushed? I sensed the light taking inventory, counting each strand of my hair, memorizing my face.

My mind was flooded with crazy shapes and then I lost all sense of direction. Where was I? Who was I? A strange voice answered inside my head:

Crucial to finding the way is this: there is no beginning or end.

I picked up a key. There was no door to unlock so I swallowed it.

Suddenly I was transported to a garden where a man and a women dined. She was my doppelganger. I watched from afar, yet I could feel the sweat on her neck. He was telling her stories of knights and helpless maidens. I wanted to pull her away and save her.

My alarm blared. Maybe next time.

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Written for Prosery Monday at dVerse. Today Merril asks us to insert the following line from Joy Harjo’s A Map to the Next World: “Crucial to finding the way is this: there is no beginning or end.” 

Published by Tricia Sankey

Plays with words in her free time.

52 thoughts on “The Garden

  1. Oooooh good one! Fantasy or fiction? I think she needs red sequined shoes to click together at the same time she says “Home”! 🙂

  2. This is a wonderful fairy tale/dream-like enchantment that is rich for mining meaning from. You told a lot of story in 144 words, Tricia.

  3. This was so much fun, Tricia. You might know that I love thinking about time and timelines, and as I was reading, I was thinking this sounds like a dream. I wonder who the strange voice belonged to though. 😀

    1. Thanks, Merril, enjoyed your prompt! I had some of these ideas in my head from other short tweets I’ve written, and I was thinking this could be like a time traveling dream. Your guess is as good as mine on the strange voice right now! 🤣

  4. Tricia,
    Oh no! Save her before it’s too late and she’s fed too much fantasy romances! Loved the twist at the end. Our heroine lives in the “real” world. 🙂
    Pax,
    Dora

  5. Darn that alarm clock. It spoiled all the fun …. or all the ??? … oh well (sigh).

  6. Excellent flash fiction Tricia: I love the way you have created a self-contained story in so few words! And my favourite line:

    ‘I picked up a key. There was no door to unlock so I swallowed it.’

  7. Really loved this completed yet complex short story. Glad to read another take on the line and dreams.
    I too love the Alice in Wonderland feel. And the swallowing of the key since there are no doors is absolutely brilliant.

  8. I like the way you just dove right into the story immediately taking us with you and every line brought a new layer or twist. Nice one!

  9. Doppelganger! Goodness, this is an exquisite, exquisite dreamscape 💝 it makes me think that perhaps our subconscious mind is trying to tell us something.. to pick a path and see where it goes. Who knows? We might end up gaining sense of direction and more 🙂

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