
“I’ve visited this planet in my dreams.” A beautiful woman, who was much older than she looked, assessed Earth from the open window of her craft. “But these clouds are clearly foreign, such an exotic clutter.” Against the blue cloth of the sky, the fragile pink puffs seemed harmless. However, upon closer inspection, she could see their metallic sheen. Chemtrails. The US Government had been using them for decades to track and spy on crafts like her own. She laughed. She wanted them to find her.
The pink fluff was growing when Sabrina heard the noise. The ticking in her chest sped up. The world was shifting like some strange, subdued creature calling out.
“They thought our magic was gone,” she said to no one, knowing her words would filter into the pink haze and startle human ears. She laughed again. “Come get me!”
Written for Prosery: Clouds, where Merril hosts at dVerse. The challenge is to write a piece of flash fiction with a 144-word limit and include the following line from “Clouds,” by Constance Urdang:
“But these clouds are clearly foreign, such an exotic clutter
Against the blue cloth of the sky”
The ending is so wicked and twisted. I wonder the intensity of her magic if it had to be to the point of being spied on from the government among other things. Such amazing writing, Tricia, I was sucked into the story instantly! I love how you went sci-fi with this one. 😀 I can hear her words, “Come get me!” distort into echoes over and over again that it could cause an observer nightmares at the scene.
Thanks, Lucy, so glad you enjoyed it! This woman was fun to write, haha! 💗
I love your intriguing story… and you left us hanging…. Well done.
Thanks, Dwight! I may have to continue this one later!
Great idea!
I think she is a little dangerous! You won’t be able to close the door after you find her! I like the open ending of this piece that lets the reader flesh out the rest of the story.
Thanks! It does leave much to the imagination! 💗
She’s an intriguing character. I hope she means well and can get us out of our jam. Really good story, Tricia.
I think that could be an interesting twist! Perhaps she loves Earth enough to save her! 💓
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A delightful story!
Thanks, Carol! 💕
A truly interesting character and setting! I’d enjoy learning more. You wove the prompt into your tale with expert craftmanship.
Thanks so much, Susan! 💓
I loved this story with twists. Ending is awesome 👏
Thanks for reading! 💖
Such an interesting story, Tricia! It makes me wonder so much about who she is and what she wants. I could definitely see more to this.
Thanks, Merril! Prosery Mondays are great for getting new ideas on the page, I appreciate your prompt! 💝
You’re welcome! 😀
Now there an interesting twist. Confirmation, at last!
Thanks, Ken! UFO’s have fascinated me lately, happy to provide confirmation! 😆
I love how you tied this to the conspiracy of chemtrails and turned it magic. I wonder if we should fear her magic or not.
She definitely has an agenda! Thanks, Bjorn! 💓
Oh deliciously dark. I loved this Tricia! ☺️💕
Thanks for your comment, Christine! 💗
Amazing, Tricia ❤
-David
Thanks, David! 💖
I love this! What a wonderful take on the prompt 🙂
Thanks so much, Marie! 💕
This was intriguing and fun to read – not a being to be toyed with!
Thanks for reading! Yes, I don’t think it’s wise to cross this woman! 😆
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this felt like a prologue of an exciting and enchanting novel. well done!!
I appreciate your feedback, maybe I will extend it! 💓