I meditate on space
fold each corner into my soul
glossy and clear
~I transmute all pain~
carve a sacred symbol
that germinates
see the clever, cubed, crystal –
there’s room inside
read my invitation –
don’t be fooled by shadows
forever draws no circles
but charges
with sharp elbows
her blows pierce
and soften
~activate your center~
let’s spin on our sides
and bleed
rainbows
on walls
Sanaa is today’s host for dVerse’ Poetics. Sanaa says:
For today’s Poetics I invite you all to play a poetry game called, “Dungeons and Derivatives.” The idea here is to select one (from a list of eight sentences) and to change at least one word or more by replacing it with a derivative. Once you are done, unlock the muse from its dungeon and write a poem with the existing sentence… The sentence will change yes, after replacing a word or two with derivatives. Don’t be shy to mold it accordingly.
I chose the sentence: “Perhaps we are reading the shadows wrong; forever cannot draw a circle.” – by Sanaa Rizvi, from, Winter Moon ~ Part Three: Petals of the Sun
Tricia Sankey 
Triciaaaa wowwwww!!! 😍😍 This is gorgeous, gorgeous work here! I love that you took liberty with the quote .. that is exactly what the challenge called for 🙂 especially admire; “forever draws no circles, but charges with sharp elbows,” yes!! Thank you so much for writing to the prompt! 💝💝
So happy you approve!! 🥳 Once I saw the picture and read your sentence this flowed like magic! ✨ Love a good prompt! 💗🙏💗
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Beautifully penned!
Thanks, Lucy! 💕
Very nice flow here! I enjoyed the way the poem was broken to highlight specific pauses and sections.
Appreciate your thoughtful comment! 💓
I did not recognize the original lines as you deftly made this your own. Love the format and the strong message of your words.
Appreciate your comment, Grace, I did enjoy playing with the quote! 💗
You’ve conjured something exquisite here, a seed that can be taken in to germinate. True magic, Tricia.
Love your comment, Lisa! 💞
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This is wonderful Tricia – a poem of endless possibilities: exactly what is suggested by Sanaa’s lines! ❤️
Yes! Thanks, Ingrid! 💝
Absolutely gorgeous piece of writing
Luv luv this alliterative line:
“see the clever, cubed, crystal –”
Much💖love
Thank you, Gillena! I did play around with that line tweaking it a few times! 💓
Love how you folded corners into your soul …. well done!
Thanks, Helen! 🥰
Oh I love it, the lines from Sannaa not possible to spot, and that closing – wow
Love your comments! Thanks, so much! 💖
Splendid writing, Tricia! You owned the prompt line beautifully. 💞
Thanks so much, Punam! 💗
My pleasure. ❤️
I was not expecting those words following the previous line, Tricia… very clever!
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David
I’m glad that line worked for you, David, thanks for your feedback! 💓
I loved these opening lines:-
“I meditate on space
fold each corner into my soul”
It pulled me to your poem. 🙂
Happy to hear that, thanks for reading! 💗
You are welcome. 🙂
Tricia,
“Let’s spin on our sides,” — I love the colors, the dimensions, that you evoke so effortlessly, and with style. Wonderful.
pax,
dora
Thanks, Dora! 💓
YW 💞