A Shadow of You

There is a shadow of you, shattered there –
with dark fragments floating, I trace you with
fair fingers and cold stars, a strange affair
with little reason and faulty rhyme with

too much pain and desire, we break into
a sweat, counting cracked, broken moons, learn a
new language where mystic tongues curse anew
a sacred scroll splays out – read it now, a

strange story indeed, with perfectly strange
beginnings and silly ends, beginnings
change meaning, with old metaphors, and change
ending rhymes around, forever ending.

Demand order. Demand truth. Yes, demand.
Understand chaos and lies. Understand?

Photo by Bianca Salgado on Pexels.com

Written for dVerse, where Laura asks us to write sonnets of 14 lines and 10 syllables (iambic pentameter is optional extra) while starting and ending each line with the same word (including derivatives and homophones).

The word β€˜shadow’ or its derivative should be in the poem’s title, and the notion of shadow as metaphor or reality should feature somewhere in your poem.

Published by Tricia Sankey

Plays with words in her free time.

58 thoughts on “A Shadow of You

  1. Speechless Tricia…I am rather besotted by such poetry…and it’s not just a stunning set of words that flows so well, despite the limitations of the prompt — that are gone here, of course, but also as the whole poem is a metaphor itself, throwing imagery and ideas at me …brilliant, just brilliant..

  2. Dare I be the one to give you a certificate Tricia – you rose to the challenge like a rainbow trout to the bait! ;). Enjoyed reading and re-reading this especially these lines
    “There is a shadow of you, shattered there –
    with dark fragments floating, I trace you with
    fair fingers and cold stars, a strange affair”

  3. Exceptionally well done. Really. Exceptional. You’ve taken the shadow repeat and used it to such astounding effect – it’s surprising – and yet doesn’t seem heavy-handed or throbbing (as in a stuttering pause that breaks the natural flow of the poem). I really love the power of the word choice in the first two stanzas – it paints a delicious picture.

    1. Thanks for your thoughtful comment! I always feel so biased at times on what I think works in my poems, so it’s nice to hear what other’s appreciate in my writing! πŸ’–

      1. I think inherent bias in our own interpretations and poetic creations is natural – a given. The more I amuse myself on thinking on “what makes poetry poetry” and the act of its creation, the more I’m lead to believe it is, ultimately, a very selfish act. πŸ˜‚
        At any rate, I think your sonnet is really outstanding. All of it. Truly, one of the ones on tap that has impressed me the most. Skillfully well done!

  4. A stunning shadow sonnet, Tricia! Love the first two stanzas especially, and this sort of breathless feeling as the words unfold, and there almost being a riddle hidden among them. ❀

    1. Thanks Bjorn, I agree about the best resolution often being a question. I’m editing the end of my novella right now to put on Amazon by the end of the month and I think leaving a bit of mystery at the end will work there too. I have more questions than answers in life so it works! πŸ˜„

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