Same old storyline, I saw myself fall for you.
You in every silly dream, a repeating
repeating tragedy, with slipping
slipping reality, I wonder who is cursing me
me sinking in a sea of soliloquy, strangling
Written for dVerse Poet’s Pub where Grace challenges us to write a loop poem! I picked this variation:
One long stanza, no limit on number of lines, no rhyming scheme, the last word, first word scheme is maintained.
(My rhyme is not ordered, and I like it that way) 😆
35 thoughts on “Strangling Silhouettes”
Creative use of repetition.
Thanks, Michele, this really challenged me! ❣️
You met the challenge! 😊
Really wonderful grasp of the form Tricia. The repetition of repeating and slipping really worked, as the mirrored the action they described.
Yes, there were only so many repeating words I liked, thus the brevity! 😆 But I had fun with this! 💓
I love the echoes of the repeating, slipping, sinking, strangling. Packs a punch for a short poem too! Thanks for joining in.
Thanks for hosting, Grace, I appreciated the variation and challenge!
So pleasing to the ear. Love it. 👏
Thanks so much, Selma! I did like the loopy beat in this! 💓
A wonderful poem! Repetition of words adds their own impact.
Thanks, I agree, it’s fun to push a few words deeper into the mind here and there! ❣️
You’re right. Thanks and welcome 😊💖
Great use of the form – ‘me sinking in a sea of soliloquy’ – love this line,
It’s fun to say, that’s for sure! 😆
This is an interesting form, Tricia, and I like what you’ve done with it!
Thanks, I appreciated the variation Grace allowed with stanzas, happy this worked out! 💖
Strangling silhouettes …. so evocative! Excellent poem, Tricia!
I appreciate your comment, glad you enjoyed, Reena! 💓
Oo, I so enjoy the feel of this poem as the repetition changes the overall imagery! ❤
Thanks, Jaya, so glad it worked for you!! 💓
Your words echo loud and clear and such wonderful repeat throughout Tricia! 💖
Thanks, Cindy! Glad it worked for you! 🥰
You’re most welcome! 💖
You captured the spellbinding nature of some relationships you can’t seem to get free from. A youtube I watched recently liked them to phantom limbs.
Thanks, Lisa! I wrote this after tweeting an opening to a short story I’m thinking of writing. https://twitter.com/triciasankey/status/1552690465635504130?t=tHDnuuGX51Ko3ty-rQR7eQ&s=19
The ache of a phantom limb is intriguing when thinking about unresolved relationships!
Wow Tricia write it and I will read it. I remember that line in one of the Terminator movies where Michael Biehn’s character said, “I came across time for you, Sarah.” :::swoon::: I don’t remember who said the phantom limb thing, it was either Richard Grannon or Sam Vaknin.
Cool! I am still hoping The Light in the Cave will make the Page Turner finals this week for a screenplay adaptation award (I will probably edit it again at that point) but after that I definitely need to write something longer again. I never really got into the Terminator movies, so I didn’t know of the line! 😆
Well you are in for a treat. I found it out on youtube:
Thanks for finding it! ☺️ I will have to try not to copy the Terminator or old Star Trek episodes because I’ve been told some of my ideas are similar there as well, but I never watched it! 😆
You’re welcome. One of my favorite scenes from a movie EVER.
It’s a great scene! 💓