what would happen if good
hell was above
and heaven below
would we strive to sin?
goodness, she says
(under her breath)
(so no one hears)
Heaven is swirling with
souls who gave
sacrificed their happiness
there’s no reward?
yet, humans still fall
head over heels
into that light
where ego dies
and form dissolves
we want that poison
pill that shatters
in the end
Written for dVerse Poetics: The good and the evil
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A different take but imagine if that happens – trading spaces will be chaos. Food for thought piece.
Thanks! I was toying with the idea of good being more tempting than evil, if we were expected to shun the light. It would be interesting!!
I love your take on this. It certainly makes you think Tricia. Well done 💕☺️
Thanks, Christine, the topic definitely challenged me! 💝
Wouldn’t that be interesting to see, how, if heaven and hell switched places, and people are now, striving to, get to hell, because it’s, high up, and, wouldn’t this world be, a total mess then, maybe even, just, a little bit, worse that it currently, is…
Yes, I was thinking this, but then maybe we would feel the disconnect even that much more and secretly long for the good. I think once inundated with evil then good is desired more, but maybe there are some who would still prefer the evil. 🤔
Isn’t this happening already? We have politicians who lie and line their own pockets at the public expense, magazines that blandly report infidelities, a society that seems to value money above everything. Some great lines here. Tricia.
Yes, we are definitely getting to that point where up is down and praying it wakes us up about our values and we see the consequences and begin to choose wiser! ♥️🙏♥️
Good questions, Tricia, but who can answer them? I enjoyed the way Neil Gaiman and Terry Prachett tried in their book Good Omens, but there have been many attempts in literature, and we’re still asking the questions.
True, Kim, it’s my curious nature to ask questions but I’ve come to realize some topics will never fully be answered. 💞
I’m with the ancient Irish on this one. No heaven, no hell, no good, no evil, no sin and no shaming. Just a place beyond death where everyone goes, to pick up the life they left, in the same world, except better, better weather and plenty to eat 🙂
😄 thanks, Jane! 💝
Interesting thought. Liked it.
Happy to hear! 💝
Tricia, I love how you turned things on their head! I remember one of our teachers had said that evil was more attractive so that it would be able to lure people. I wonder why good id not considered attractive. Very thought provoking. ❤️
Exactly! Thanks for this challenge, so many great posts to read and analyze! 💝
You are so welcome. 💖
I agree, very interesting and great posts that make one ponder.
Ah! This one just made me sigh with happiness. It reads so true.
Thanks, it is a happy message in the end! ♥️🌹♥️
The perfect response to Punam’s prompt, Tricia! 💖
Thanks, Ingrid, I tried! Happy you like it! 💝
An enticing yet very precise run on the prompt/challenge. Well done, Tricia.
Thanks, Bill! Glad it enticed you! 💝
Your poem brings up some great questions. What are people striving for and do they even know what direction they hope to reach? I always appreciate when a poem makes me think. Thanks for sharing.
Appreciate your comment, Ali! I just let my thoughts go here and hoped for the best! 😄
Tricia, you got me thinking about that idea. What do you think about the idea that we are already living in hell by having to endlessly hash over this impossible paradox of the relativity of things? Us arrogant humans feel so superior to every other thing, living and dead, on the planet, yet none of them are wasting a moment’s time considering any of it, they are just busy living. I think humans are the most dangerous, yet most pitiable thing ever created 😦
I can see your point, that really our ignorance is hell. It makes me think of Jesus saying “forgive them, they know not what they do,” because most don’t and that is hell. Reason for pity, yes!
Sometimes we can’t tell the difference…it’s interesting that you use the word striving. It’s such a harsh word, I can’t associate it with doing good. Trying too hard won’t work I think. Doing good should not be a sacrifice either. You raise a lot of good questions. Food for thought.
appreciate your comments! Some of my lines were a little sarcasm for how people think doing good and evil are and what would happen if all of our ideas were flipped. I agree we should not feel like we have to suffer to be good and constantly sacrifice. 👍💝
An amazing write, speaking to me of the nature of desire, of the valley’s and rhe mountain tops. A lovely one, Tricia! 💞
Thanks, Jeff! ♥️♥️♥️
In my view for most people, it would be much more challenging to constantly do evil…
Thanks, Bjorn! I totally agree. For most people we gravitate towards love, as it always feels so much better than hate! 💗🌷💗
wow Tricia … truly an amazing write.. food for thought alright! 💞
Glad you could chew on it, Cindy! 😄💖
💗 mee too. ❤️